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 Jun 12 2006, 04:02 PM
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 Lord of the Keys  Group: Established Members Posts: 2,197 Joined: 1-October 04 From: Wonderful-smelling dwelling in French-Canada Member No.: 1,329 Gender: Female  |
Hello everyone. I have no plans to make this a habit, but I've written this fragment of something and am curious to see what you folks might think. It's short, I swear!
---- If you walk in my school before the bell rings all the cripples come out. There's the boy with the neck-brace neck, the crutched ones limping towards more extreme field hockey careers, the cerebral palsy twins. They flood the hallways and search each other's faces. Behind them creep backpack kids, loaded with too much stuff already, embarrassed with their inappropriately functional legs. Briefly, they're all you can see. Row after row of weak-kneed kids with the walkers, whitefaced kids with the pain of broken legs etched below the skin still. If you were walking in my school before the bell, you'd call CPS. ---- Thoughts? -------------------- can I kiss your dopamine? In a way I wonder if she's living in a magazine |
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Jun 12 2006, 08:32 PM
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 Dirty Laundry Group: Established Members Posts: 3,191 Joined: 7-January 05 From: By London Member No.: 1,573 Gender: Female |
More story please!
This is great. -------------------- Emma <3 James <3
"Music is a moral law. It gives a soul to the universe, wings to the mind, flight to the imagination, a charm to sadness, gaiety and life to everything. It is the essence of order, and leads to all that is good, just and beautiful, of which it is the invisible, but nevertheless dazzling, passionate, and eternal form." - Plato |
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elphaba2 Small Piece of a Story Jun 12 2006, 04:02 PM
Cookieflair OoOoOh this is good!
Now I want MORE MORE MOO... Jun 12 2006, 08:42 PM oscarhilton Thats some strong work you've got there. Keep ... Jun 13 2006, 04:23 PM elphaba2 *blushes, pulls woolen cap over eyes*
Thankee. I... Jun 16 2006, 11:18 PM Greeneyes It's interesting. Just one possible suggestion... Jun 17 2006, 01:00 PM
Saratina f you walk in my school before the bell rings all ... Jun 20 2006, 12:57 AM |
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