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Jaq
Hmm. wrote this in April but just rediscovered it on my LJ. Figured I might post it here. What do you think?

Chaos

There is unrest
A whirling chaotic multicoloured ball tangled floss
spinning faster and faster and by spinning
becoming more and more tangled
I try to straighten it out
find my centre
a solid core
The colour to replace the multitude, red
the shape, from the tangled, straight
A deep straight red line
will replace the chaos
the entropy
Confusion
Hate.
This time?
one colour and direction
Will add to the tangled mass
There are many red stripes in this ball
More than I admit
They have all failed
Working momentarily
Before getting caught up in this whirling mass
But it works for the moment
Sometimes that's good enough
LoLo
I like that Jaq. **snaps fingers as a form of clapping**
Jaq
QUOTE (LoLo @ Jan 6 2004, 09:35 AM)
**snaps fingers as a form of clapping**

*smokes ciggerette*

*wears black beret*

*tries to grow goatee*

*fails*

thanks, man
EvilSpork
Beautiful.
FunkyGothCheeseMonkey
Sweetness dude
Tigersong
It's... profound in the fact that it's disturbing. It's like... a tormented soul crying out, only not.

Lol. Funky said that you is a "dude." tongue.gif
the lil' pie fairy
i like that. it makes sense. it's really good smile.gif
Jaq
QUOTE (Tigersong @ Jan 7 2004, 12:55 AM)
It's... profound in the fact that it's disturbing. It's like... a tormented soul crying out, only not.

Lol. Funky said that you is a "dude." tongue.gif

Erm.. I'mma take the first thing as a compliment and point and laugh at you for the second thing.
Tigersong
QUOTE (Jaq @ Jan 7 2004, 09:18 AM)
QUOTE (Tigersong @ Jan 7 2004, 12:55 AM)
It's... profound in the fact that it's disturbing.  It's like... a tormented soul crying out, only not.

Lol.  Funky said that you is a "dude."  tongue.gif

Erm.. I'mma take the first thing as a compliment and point and laugh at you for the second thing.

As you should. /spam
Silver Star Angel of Da Towers
ooooooooooh that's good. Sounds better than some professional stuff I've heard! laugh.gif
deranged_ferret
Ooooooo.... Uber-Greatness! *Wuvs poem* biggrin.gif
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