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Dreams On Hiatus
Please read my short story and let me know what you think. Constuctive criticism welcome!

Here's the link: Caden's Seashell Scroll down and click on the story link that says "Caden's Seashell."

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someone
A beautiful story!
And perhaps a little suggestion: Although the details in your story are very important and create this wonderous atmosphere I think there are places where you added just a few details that didnt quite fit in. Like that the father sat down cross legged!? things like that...

But a truly beautiful story.
Silver Star Angel of Da Towers
Es muy bonita!!! It makes me wanna cry!
Dreams On Hiatus
biggrin.gif Thank you! I'm glad you liked my story.

Thanks for the suggestions, someone!
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