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> "Exploration" alternate ending (read original 1st), A humorous alternate ending to the poem.
FeralPolyglot
post Mar 17 2006, 08:14 PM
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<Poet's note:> **I highly recommend reading the original "Explorations" first to get the full weight of the poem** While I was writing the original poem, I was trying to get the ending right and was frolicking in the fields of inspiration. In the process, this alternate ending came into being. Enjoy.</pn>

From my mouth, my mind's eye, tumble
Words, phrases bumble, they all
Fall and patterns like in the sand
Make raindrops falling, Calling
To be let out; fall free Like the Bee
Bumble, tumbling what they need, to flow. Need to
Go, show what they want to feel. Feelings sending they
Ripples of chills down my spine. Mine
Yours together we feel, follow down. Down
I push your head; Your breath, red, across my skin,
Akin to the canvas, painter's home, like animals,
your hands also Roam. Explore. Finding more
Words anew, breaths askew. Under my palms,
My hands,
I feel you.

Ragged breaths now drawn asunder
From my palms, my fingers under
Grasping, kneading, feeling skin
Try to taste the flames within

Eyelids clasped like hands in prayer
Though they're closed, I see you there
Feeling, riding rhythm's beat
Intoxicated on the heat

Catch your breath, our rhythm quickens
Like a book, the plot now thickens...
Then a voice moans in the dark,
"..mor-- Mar-- MARK!!!"

*record scratching to a halt*

...."Who the $#@% is Mark?"


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pgrmdave
post Mar 27 2006, 03:40 AM
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I like it, you should post more of your poetry. I know I commented already in person, but now it's in writing.


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post Mar 27 2006, 04:05 PM
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I agreee with Dave. It's very well done. happy.gif


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